I do use him in-game. He's the first champion I ever bought. I bought him because i thought he looked really cute. You have no idea how much I failed at using him at first. But I got better the more I used him. He's my main champion now.
Not to be an asshole grammar Nazi (though I'm aware that that's exactly what I'm about to sound like), but being the graduate journalism student I am I often can't help it making corrections. Anyways, you (LadyDarque/Leilanna Darque) should put a few minutes of your day aside and do a little research into when and when not to use commas. In your case, that would mainly be learning when not to use them; you should have gone without every single one of those commas. I personally find descriptions that are essentially just big collections of comma splice errors very distracting (which, again, that most certainly doesn't apply either universally or to the DeviantART users and lurkers viewing this submission). Anyways, in case you're curious what should be changed, here is how that summary should look like (or rather what it should look like in the problematic portions of your description--i.e.: lines 2-4):
Amumu is a champion from the game[comma removed] League of Legends. Made of polymer clay[comma removed]and[replacing comma]painted with acrylic paint[comma removed] with a little glue on the eyes for a shine[comma removed] and teary effect. I made a prototype first[comma removed] then made the final sculpture.
But yeah, again, I'm sorry if I sound like a prick. I really do like the sculpture. You did an excellent job and my grammar Nazi tendencies stem not from an air of superiority in writing skill but rather from an honest intent to provide the one type of constructive criticism I can bring to the table (grammar and syntax). Basically, I don't know shit about art but I am a plenty good enough writer to provide good feedback on the written front. Besides, I don't actually care too much at all if your grammar is faulty; who ever said artists need a perfect grasp of the grammatical structure of English? Certainly not me.
Thank you very much for your constructive criticism. I am not being sarcastic when I say I do appreciate it. I am sorry that you found the unnecessary commas distracting. I hope that this did not prevent you from appreciating my artwork. I will be sure to pay more attention to eliminating these in the future. I changed the description according to your suggestion, and I must admit it does sound better than the original when read aloud. I will be looking for you for feedback on my descriptions in my future submissions.
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Do you use him in-game?
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I do use him in-game. He's the first champion I ever bought. I bought him because i thought he looked really cute. You have no idea how much I failed at using him at first. But I got better the more I used him. He's my main champion now.
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I eat boys
Anyways, in case you're curious what should be changed, here is how that summary should look like (or rather what it should look like in the problematic portions of your description--i.e.: lines 2-4):
But yeah, again, I'm sorry if I sound like a prick. I really do like the sculpture. You did an excellent job and my grammar Nazi tendencies stem not from an air of superiority in writing skill but rather from an honest intent to provide the one type of constructive criticism I can bring to the table (grammar and syntax). Basically, I don't know shit about art but I am a plenty good enough writer to provide good feedback on the written front. Besides, I don't actually care too much at all if your grammar is faulty; who ever said artists need a perfect grasp of the grammatical structure of English? Certainly not me.
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Epic work though
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